My Poem about water parks:
We arrive at the gate
“this is gonna be great”
walking across the warm concrete
The new water park is finally complete
I've heard that the water slides go up so high
then they drop you and then you glide
down and down oh so deep
the slide currents are there to sweep
You hit the bottom all twisted and spun
You do it again and again oh so fun
that was what they said let's see if it's true
Now it's time to go in for a view
We hear splashing and playing
Slapping and spraying Each other with water in their face
After running away like a high speed chase
We love the new water park we’re glad that it's open
The grand new water park has finally awoken
Awesome poem Michael. I like the way you've used couplets (pairs of lines that rhyme). Have you tried recording your poem?
ReplyDeletethis is a very great poem and you should make one more
ReplyDeleteHi my name is Willow and I go to Kaitaia intermediate school. And maybe you could go over and check that it make sure it rhymes. I liked the way you described the water parks well done.
ReplyDeleteI love the describing words you used in your poetry. Keep the good writing up !
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ReplyDeleteThat's a really good piece of writing Shandy ;)
ReplyDeleteThe words you have chosen really capture the essence of a water park.